If I could point to one mistake that trips up more first-time children’s authors than any other, it would be this:
They try to say too much.
Many new writers begin with the best intentions.
They want their story to teach important lessons, inspire children, address multiple issues, and create memorable characters. The problem is that they often try to fit all of those goals into one book.
The result? A story that feels crowded, confusing, and unfocused.
“Saying too much” within one story can come about in different ways. Here are three of them.
- The Problem with Multiple Themes
A common mistake is trying to teach several lessons at once. And it’s an easy trap to fall into.
For example, a writer may create a story about a child who learns to share, tell the truth, be kind to others, respect differences, and work hard. And this is all done within 24-26 pages of text and illustrations, if it’s a standard 32-page picture book.
That’s a lot for young readers to process. Kids like and need simplicity.
Instead, choose one focus theme.
If your story is about sharing, let sharing drive the character’s journey.
Other lessons may naturally appear along the way, but they shouldn’t compete for center stage. Learning how to make friends can come from sharing.
When every theme in your story is equally important, none of them stand out.
- Beware of Overexplaining
New authors often worry that children won’t understand the story unless everything is explained. Even some seasoned authors can overexplain before they catch themselves.
As a result, new authors tell readers exactly what a character is feeling, why they’re feeling it, and what lesson they learned.
Even some seasoned authors can over explain before they catch themselves.
Keep in mind, though, that young readers are smarter than many adults give them credit for. They like discovering meaning for themselves.
Instead of writing:
“Maya realized that sharing her markers was important because sharing helps people make friends.”
You might show it:
“When Maya slid her markers across the table, three classmates scooted closer and smiled.”
The second example allows children to experience the lesson rather than being lectured about it.
- Cut the Long Backstory
Another place where first-time authors often get stuck is backstory.
They want readers to know everything about their character before the story begins, including the character’s family history, favorite activities, past experiences, and personal struggles.
But young readers don’t need all that information upfront.
They need the story to start.
Imagine opening a book and spending three pages learning where a character was born, what happened last summer, and why they dislike broccoli before anything actually happens.
Most children will lose interest. Give readers only the information they need right now. And part of that ‘now’ information is the conflict; the reason for the story.
The backstory can be woven naturally into the story—or left out entirely. This is the case with picture books. There’s just not enough space to include it.
So, what do you do to avoid the above mistakes?
FOCUS ON ONE CLEAR EMOTIONAL ARC
The most memorable children’s books usually follow one emotional journey.
-Maybe a character learns confidence.
-Maybe they overcome a fear.
-Maybe they discover the value of friendship.
-Maybe they discover the value of honesty.
Whatever the arc, keep it clear and focused.
When the character’s goal and emotional growth (the character arc) are easy to follow, readers become invested. They cheer for the character, connect with the story, and remember it long after they’ve finished reading.
The strongest children’s books are usually built around one simple idea.
WHY SIMPLICITY WORKS
Children don’t read stories the same way adults do. They have shorter attention spans, less life experience to draw from, and a strong need for clarity.
That doesn’t mean children’s books can’t be meaningful or layered. Some of the most beloved books contain powerful themes and emotional depth. But those elements are presented through a simple, focused story.
Think about many classic picture books and chapter books. At their core, they often explore one central challenge, one emotional journey, or one important lesson.
The story knows exactly what it wants to say.
An example of this is “The Three Little Pigs.” It’s a powerhouse of emotion and a valuable life lesson.
SUMMING IT UP
Writing for children isn’t about packing more into a story. It’s about choosing what matters most and letting it shine.
Before you revise your manuscript, ask yourself:
• What is my main theme?
• What emotional journey does my character take?
• Have I included unnecessary explanations?
• Can I remove any backstory?
• Does every scene support the central idea?
If the answer is yes, you’re on the right track.
The stories children remember aren’t usually the ones that try to teach everything. They’re the ones that do one thing exceptionally well.
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