As a children’s author, ghostwriter, and coach, over the many years and many stories, I’ve only seen one story that couldn’t be tweaked, nudged, shaken, or even deconstructed and reconstructed into a publishable story.
The concept and author of that one book were, well, not quite all there. Dealing with so many clients, I’m surprised I’ve only had one so far.
Aside very specific situations, a ghostwriter or rewriter can magically turn most stories or drafts into something an author will be proud to be the author of.
A big problem I see is that new authors sometimes don’t know what a publishable story is.
But wait a minute.
Let me clarify what I mean about ‘a publishable book’ because any story can become published today, whether poorly written or well-written story.
When I use the term “publishable,” I’m talking about a book that meets the standard children’s U.S. publishing guidelines.
Three of the top mistakes I see that would warrant taking another stab at your story or demolishing it and starting over are:
1. The point-of-view
You’re writing a picture book or chapter book and have more than one point-of-view (POV).
Multiple POVs can happen when you have two or more main characters in your story or if you have head-hopping in your story.
Let’s go back a step and define POV.
Every story has to be told from someone’s perspective. In other words, who is the story about?
In young children’s writing you must clearly define who the protagonist (main character) is. And, there should only be one.
Jerry Jenkins, author of over 190 books, says he avoids slipping into an omniscient viewpoint “by imagining my Point of View or Perspective Character as my camera—I’m limited to writing only what my character ‘camera’ sees, hears, and knows.”
So, POV is a critical element of your story. Check to make sure you have only one POV and it’s that of the protagonist.
Head-hopping is slipping from one character’s POV to another, within the same page, paragraph, or sentence.
In the example below, Tommy is the protagonist:
Tommy dug his cleats in. He raised the bat to his shoulder. A second later he watched the ball heading toward him . . . like a torpedo out of its tube. Without blinking, he swung the bat. CRRAACCK. Stunned, he dropped the bat and ran. Did . . . Did I just hit the ball?
“Pete,” said Jim with a nudge, “you see that. I didn’t think he’d hit that ball—it came so fast.” Jim threw a pretend pitch. “Look at him running those bases.”
The second paragraph in the example, just above, is a no-no. It brings Jim’s perspective into the story since Tommy couldn’t see or hear him.
Tommy is the protagonist and must know what’s going on in the story, or it can’t be in the story.
This could be rewritten, though:
Tommy dug his cleats in. He raised the bat to his shoulder. A second later, he watched the ball heading toward him . . . like a torpedo out of it tube. Without blinking he swung the bat. CRRAACCK. Stunned, he dropped the bat and ran. Did . . . did I just hit the ball.
When Tommy raced to home plate, he heard Jim yelling, “I didn’t think he’d hit that ball. It came so fast.”
Now it’s all from Tommy’s point of view.
2. Adults save the day.
Children want to read about children. They want the protagonist to solve his own problem.
While parents or other adults in a story can be a support system, their involvement needs to be minimal. The young protagonist needs to come up with a solution to her problem.
In “Stephanie’s Ponytail” by Robert Munsch, Stephanie wants to be unique. Here’s how the story starts:
“One day Stephanie went to her mom and said, ‘None of the kids in my class have a ponytail. I want a nice ponytail coming right out the back.’”
The problem, though, is the day after Stephanie comes in with that particular ponytail, all the girls in her class have it. So, each day she asks her mother to create another specific ponytail. The day after each new ponytail, the class copies her.
In the end, Stephanie comes up with a clever and funny idea that cures the class of copying her.
While the mother is involved in the story, Stephanie comes up with all the ideas. And it’s Stephanie who solves the problem.
3. Jumping in without learning how to swim first.
You’ve wanted to write a children’s book for years. You have tons of ideas, and you’ve even written down a couple. It’s gotten to a point where you can’t wait any longer; you put one of your ideas into a story.
You type or write away. Finally, you have your story, and it seems great. Or so it seems.
-Picture books can be ten pages, right?
-You ‘kind of’ draw, so you can create your own illustrations, right?
-You have a couple of rhymes here and there, so that’s good, right?
While you may have a great story idea, standard picture books usually have 32 pages of which 24-26 pages are for story and interior illustrations. You shouldn’t create your own illustrations unless you’re a professional illustrator. And, either you’ve written a rhyming story or not.
There are lots of other elements that you need to be aware of before jumping in to write a publishable book. You really should learn at least the basics of writing for children.
So, there you have it, three top children’s writing mistakes.
If I were to give a number four, it would be that you have TOO much showing in the story.
If I were to offer a number 5, it would be that you’re trying to knock the young reader over his head with the moral of the story.
I hope these tips help you when you sit down to write your story.
References:
HOW TO WRITE A CHILDREN’S FICTION BOOK
POV with Jerry Jenkins
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