Sep 19

Do Your Characters’ Descriptions Matter?

Character descriptions are super important.

To answer the title question, character descriptions are essential.

It’s these descriptions that give the reader insight into the character, and let the reader know:

-What type of person she is
-What his family is like
-What his education status is
-What her hobbies are
-What she’s passionate about
-What she’s afraid of
-What his physical details are
-What his social standing is
-Where she lives

The list can go on to include talents, sports, beliefs, and so much more if the story calls for it.

Just a simple description of a character drawing tells the reader about him. It’s possible he’s artistic. Whether he’s talented at it or not will give another element of his personality.

Suppose he’s terrible at drawing but does it anyway. What can that tell the reader about him? Possibly he’s determined. He may march to his own drum, or he just likes it and doesn’t care about excelling in it.

Maybe another character studies all the time and gets all As. Maybe the character studies all the time and barely passes. This gives a big clue as to the ‘character’ of these characters. The one who gets all As is driven. The one who barely passes may not be driven but knows without the struggling, she’ll fail. Possibly character isn’t as intelligent as the first.

What if a character is always yelled at and put down by his father? Might that help the reader understand the character’s behavioral issues?


-In the first couple of pages of middle grade Walking Through Walls, the main character Wang, is described as being disgruntled. He doesn’t like hard work. He’s impatient, and he fights with his sister.

Right off the bat, the reader knows a lot about this character. The reader may even be able to see himself in the character. This makes a connection.

What if a description shows that a character is disabled and in a wheelchair but strives to do everything she physically can do, even playing sports? What does this tell you about the character?

How about a description of a teen character lifting weights? This simple activity, combined with a couple of other details, can tell you a lot about his physical and emotional state.

Maybe he wants to be strong and look good. Maybe he’s physically on the weak side and is being bullied – he may want to be able to protect himself, take care of himself. It could even be the emotional side of it, he doesn’t want to appear weak.

How about a cross country runner or competitive swimmer? The first thing the reader may think of is that the character has physical stamina.

Another layer of the character could be the reason why he does such strenuous activity. Does he simply love it? Or, does he have ADHD or a depressive personality, and the rigorous routine helps him?

Providing character descriptions will help the reader connect to the character. Hopefully it will help create a strong connection. It will help the reader form a vested interest in what happens to the character. It will make the reader root for the character and keep turning the pages.

So, the next time you’re creating your character, be sure to think about how you can add descriptions to create a multi-dimensional character that will bring that character to life.

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5 Power-Tips to Creating Memorable Characters

From the simplest clues, a character can take shape.

Maybe you first reference the character as the boy or the tall girl. Even with those simple words, you’ve given that character life.

Before that, there wasn’t a boy or a tall girl.

But along with things (characteristics) you should include, there are a number of things you should avoid when writing your characters.

  1. Don’t over-dump physical details.

An example of this might be: Raul was tall and thin with green eyes and dark brown hair, and a swimmer’s body.

While you won’t be able to get that all in within one scene, to convey his height you might write:

When the other boys couldn’t reach the shelf, Raul got the paper airplane down. “Good thing you’re tall,” said Shawn.

To convey his hair color:

From the back, Mrs. Stenzer couldn’t tell which boy was Raul. They all had dark brown hair and were medium height.

To convey his body type:

Raul was the only new kid on the swim team to already have a swimmer’s body.

If you need or want to let the reader know the physical characteristics of the characters in your story, simply work that information in. Without dumping it.

  1. Avoid being too vague.

While you don’t need to convey every detail of a character, you can give enough to give the reader an idea of the character’s physical attributes. The reader can then fill in the details.

Two examples of this might be:

His neat cut in the back and sides was in contrast to the long hair in front that fell below his brows.

He stretched his swimmer’s body then raced into the ocean.

  1. Include the character’s environment.

A character may live in a low-income building, possibly a Section 8 apartment. Another may live in the back woods of Appalachian Mountains. All this will give insight into the character.

Or maybe the character lives in a penthouse on the Upper East Side of Manhattan. Or, possibly a character lives in Saipan.

The character’s environment can include his past environment also.

A book I’m writing now has one of the characters going from a rich lifestyle to a poor one. This could tell a lot about why the character may behave in a certain way or why she’s depressed.

Another scenario may be that the protagonist was on a swimming team since he was seven. This will tell a lot about this teen’s character. It takes discipline and drive to be a competitive swimmer. It will also have a large factor on his physical appearance.

  1. Include the character’s close relationships or past relationships.

How your character engages with the different people in his family, friends, and toward new people will show different facets of his character.

The friends he hangs around with will also show his tendencies and character. The expression ‘birds of a feather flock together’ can play a factor in the character’s character.

  1. Include appearance, clothes, and even sundry items.

How you describe your character’s appearance can tell a lot about that character.

Are his clothes neat and ironed, with shirt tucked inside his pants? Does he use starch? Or is he unkempt? Are his clothes wrinkled with shirt partially tucked in or not tucked in at all?

What about her hair. Is it a mess? Does it look dirty? Or is it well groomed?

What about his hair? Is it short? Is it long? Is it well kept?

What does she keep in her pockets or purse? What does he keep in his backpack? Is there always a pack of gum? Is there breath mints? Do they always have a candy bar on them? What about a comb?

The list can go on and on. And each little item give another clue as to the character’s character.

These are just five tips on how to use description to enhance your readers’ view of your characters. There are others, but this should give you a good foundation on creating engaging characters.


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